Helen, I'm new at this game, so cannot give the best advice (wouldn't it be nice if we got feedback from Ms Kim?) but you may find erasing some of the extraneous lines brings some clarification. You've really captured the movement of this bird and I feel that it has been encapsulated at just that moment when and where the bird itself is deciding what direction to take. This seems a real skill that I will have to move towards learning. It is like the paper isn't enough to hold the bird in place--it is off on its adventure. I like that. Jenny.